BY NGOC BACH

DẠNG BAR CHART

Biểu đồ dạng cột (Bar chart) : thường hay sử dụng để thể

hiện tương quan về độ lớn giữa các đại lượng. Trục tung

thường là số liệu, trục hoành là mốc (có thể là năm, tháng..)

BY NGOC BACH

DẠNG BAR CHART

Có 2 kiểu bar chart:

+ Có sự thay đổi theo thời gian

(Phải mô tả xu hướng, sự tăng lên, giảm xuống)

+ Không có sự thay đổi thời gian (chỉ so sánh cácitems)

Xem hướng dẫn tại đây:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R67l5N0f_Ss

BY NGOC BACH

Đề thi 25/04/2015%

DÀN BÀI CHUNG

+ MỞ BÀI

+ TỔNG QUAN

+ THÂN BÀI 1

+ THÂN BÀI 2

MỞ BÀI

CÂU ĐỀ BÀI:

A survey conducted for the places in which people gain access to the Internet from 1998 to 2004

CÂU VIẾT LẠI:The bar chart illustrates data on the percentage of users connecting to the Internet in 4 types of locations between 1998 and 2004

PARAPHRASE

TỔNG QUAN

Tìm 2 đặc điểm chung của hình ???

Overall, the percentage of people who used the Internet athome and in the library remained relatively constant,while the figures for access at work and college decreased.Also, home was by far the most common place whereusers accessed the Internet

THÂN BÀIBODY 1 BODY 2

In 1998, the proportion of users accessing the Internetfrom home was the highest, at around 54%. By contrast,the rate for those who used it at the library was at thelowest point of exactly 10%. Approximately 27% of usersconnected to the Internet at work, compared to precisely20% at college.

The percentage of Internet users gaining access from

their houses rose to approximately 55% in 2004, after a decline

of about 8% in 2000. On the other hand, the figures for access

at work and college decreased to exactly 10% and around 18%,

respectively, over the period. Users accessing the Internet at the

library increased about 5% from 1998 to 2000 and then dipped

slightly in 2002, where it remained steady throughout 2004.

The bar chart illustrates data on the percentage of users connecting to the

Internet in 4 types of locations between 1998 and 2004.

Overall, the percentage of people who used the Internet at home and in the

library remained relatively constant, while the figures for access at work and

college decreased. Also, home was by far the most common place where users

accessed the Internet

In 1998, the proportion of users accessing the Internet from home was the

highest, at around 54%. By contrast, the rate for those who used it at

the library was at the lowest point of exactly 10%. Approximately 27% of users

connected to the Internet at work, compared to precisely 20% at college.

The percentage of Internet users gaining access from their houses rose to

approximately 55% in 2004, after a decline of about 8% in 2000. On the other

hand, the figures for access at work and college decreased to exactly 10% and

around 18%, respectively, over the period. Users accessing the Internet at the

library increased about 5% from 1998 to 2000 and then dipped slightly in 2002,

where it remained steady throughout 2004.

(Band 8.0+)

Written by Ngoc Bach

BY NGOC BACH

IELTS EXAMINER COMMENTS

You covered all the requirements of the task, and all the information that you reported was accurate.

You selected information effectively, Bach and your report was clear throughout. I noted that you made

relevant comparisons between the figures and the trends. There is a lot of information in the chart – it is

quite deceptive, because at first it appears that we would be able to report almost everything, but this is not

the case.

So, I found that your detail paragraphs were organised logically, enabling trends and differences to be

compared.

My combined score for task achievement and coherence/cohesion is 9.

Some repetition is unavoidable in the language used, such as access/Internet users, and this is quite

legitimate in order to present a clear and accurate report. Of course, it is great to use language such as By

contrast/However/On the other hand..... because these are very effective words when we want to draw

contrasts. You varied your use of percentage/rate/proportion and I noted your good expression ‘by far the

most common...’ I scored 9 again for lexical resource.

Your grammar was faultless, Bach, and I noted how you varied your sentence structures. For example, in

paragraph 3, you began one sentence with the percentage: Approximately 27% of users connected to.....

The examiner should also notice your correct use of subordinate [adverb and relative clauses] and

superlatives. I have to score 9 for grammar.

My overall score is 9, a good band 9 model answer.

LƯU Ý

+ Xem file “Hướng dẫn ôn tập_Bar chart”

+ Download file “Vocabulary_Bar chart”

BY NGOC BACH

Hope you guys like my lesson ^^- Ngoc Bach

BY NGOC BACH