NEWS HEADLINES’ COMPARISON

BY DANAYA MITRAKUL55101010146

• A senior Vatican priest, stripped of his post after admitting being in a gay relationship, has launched a scathing attack on the Roman Catholic Church.

HEADLINE• Gay priest tells Pope:

Your church is making life hell for gay people

• www.pinknews.co.uk

• บาทหลวงรกรวมเพศกลาวกบสนตะปาปาวาโบสถของสนตะปาปาทำาใหชายรกรวมเพศมชวตเหมอนตกนรก

• Make readers feel curious why church makes life hell for gay people.

• Use easy word to understand but use a weak word like ‘tell’.

• Gay priest decries 'inhuman' treatment of homosexual Catholics

• http://www.bbc.com/

• บาทหลวงเกยประณามการปฏบตแบบไรมนษยธรรมของคาทอลกตอชาวรกรวมเพศ

• This headline is clear, concise, and attractive.

• Use strong words like ‘inhuman’ and ‘decry’.

• Use a various words like ‘gay’ and ‘homosexual’ to make readers not bored.

• A Common Core math assignment posted online last week is causing outrage among parents who say their child was penalized for correctly answering a question.

Headline• Outrage has followed

student being marked down for claiming 5+5+5=15

• http://www.news.com.au/

• เปนการกระทำาทโหดรายเนองจากนกเรยนถกตดคะแนนเพราะบอก 5+5+5=15

• This headline should use the active voice instead of the passive voice.

• Eg. Teacher marked down student

• Can you spot why teacher failed primary school pupil for answering 5x3=15 in maths test

• http://www.mirror.co.uk/

• คณบอกเหตผลไดหรอไมทำาไมคณครถงใหนกเรยนประถามศกษาทตอบ 5x3=15 ในแบบทดสอบคณตฯสอบตก

• This is a catchy headline that attracts readers by asking a question. The readers will be curious and find out the answer by continuing to read the next part.

• Also, attract readers by speaking to them directly.

• Cuba has become the first country to eliminate the transmission of HIV and syphilis from mother to child, according to the World Health Organisation (WHO).

Headline• WHO validates elimination

of mother-to-child transmission of HIV and syphilis in Cuba

• http://www.who.int/

• องคการอนามยโลกทำาใหการกำาจดการสงตอเชอเอดสและซฟลสจากแมสลกไดผลในประเทศควบา

• There is complete information but it’s not so interesting because of too much information. So, it can’t grab readers’ attention.

• Should use an easier word.

• Cuba stamps out mother-to-child HIV

• http://www.bbc.com/

• ประเทศควบาดบเชอเอดสจากแมสลก

• Concise and attractive• Use an interesting word like

‘stamp out’• Should add more information. It’s

not only HIV, but also syphilis.

• Obese children who cut back on their sugar intake see improvements in their blood pressure, cholesterol readings and other markers of health after just 10 days, a rigorous new study found.

Headline• Study Links Sugar to

Conditions That Lead to Diabetes, Heart Disease in Children

• http://www.wsj.com/

• จากรายงานการศกษา นำาตาลมสวนเกยวของกบสภาวะทนำาไปสโรคอวน โรคหวใจในเดก

• Not interesting• Conclude all the main details that

will make you feel no need to read more because you have already understood the main point.

• Cutting Sugar Improves Children’s Health in Just 10 Days

• www.nytimes.com

• การลดนำาตาลทำาใหสขภาพเดกดขนใน 10 วน

• Attract readers’ attention by using number ‘10 days’. Show that you will see the change in few days.

• Concise and interesting• Encourage readers to read more

by a shocking fact.

• MORE than 120 people have been injured when a high-speed ferry travelling from the Asian gambling hub of Macau to Hong Kong slammed into an object floating in the water.

Headline• Rubber tyre floating in sea

suspected of causing Macau-Hong Kong high-speed ferry crash that injured 124 passengers

• http://www.scmp.com/

• คาดวายางลอรถทลอยในทะเลจะเปนสาเหตของการชนของเรอเรวเฟอรร มาเกา-ฮองกง มผโดยสารบาดเจบ 124 ราย

• Too much information• Add many unnecessary adjective

like rubber and high-speed

• 120 hurt in Hong Kong ferry accident

• http://www.news.com.au/

• 120 คนบาดเจบจากอบตเหตเรอเฟอรรทฮองกง

• Concise and clear• Use numerals to start off the

headline.• Make readers concentrate on

number of injured than the cause of the accident.

• Omit unneeded words like ‘people’ in 120 people because it makes sense.