Combine conciseness and clarity (結合“精確寫作”及“明白寫作” )

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A:


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1.Use Active Voice Frequently


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? Modification of the heuristics was

made by Lacksonen and Enscore

(1993) to solve the dynamic layoutproblem.

: Lacksonen andEnscore(1993) modified the

heuristics to solve the dynamic

layout problem.


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? Precise measurement of neural

networks by practitioners is a

heavy emphasis of computer visionsystems.

: Computer visionsystems heavily emphasize that

practitioners precisely measure

neural networks .


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? The manager can be assisted by

the proposed model so that the

order size can be preciselydetermined.

: The proposed modelcan assist the manager in

precisely determining the order

size.


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2. Use Verbs Instead of Nouns


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? Difficulty is encountered in

explanation of the method to

inexperienced engineers owing toits computational complexity.

: Explaining the methodto inexperienced engineers is

difficult owing to its

computational complexity.


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? Knowledge of how the variables

are distributed is not required by

novice engineers

: Novice engineers do notneed to know how the variables

are distributed.


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? Not only is the variability of the

control factors considered by the

proposed procedure, butimplementation of related tasks is

performed.

: In addition toconsidering the variability of thecontrol factors, the proposed

procedure implements related

tasks.


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3. Create Strong Verbs

,is, are, was, were, has, give, make,

come,take


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? The guideline makes it specific that

all parties will be notified by the

proper authorities when a problemarises.

: The guideline specifiesthat the proper authorities will

notify all parties when a problem

arises.


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? The machine operator conducts

transportation of the auto parts to

the assembly line.

: The machine operatortransports the auto parts to the

assembly line.


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4. Avoid Overusing Sentencesthat Begin with It andThereItThere

ItThere

It

It is


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? There can be little doubt that ink jet

printers have a higher per-page

cost than laser printers.

: Ink jet printersundoubtedly have a higher per-

page cost than laser printers.


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? It is important to develop a more

effective approach to solve the

complicated problem.

: A more effectiveapproach must be developed to

solve the complicated problem.


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? There is increasing evidence that

supports the role of protein in

prolonging life.

: Increasing evidencesupports the role of protein in

prolonging life.


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5.Delete Redundant and

Needless Phrases


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? It is recommended by us that the

trackball be selected on the

occasion of purchasing a userinterface device of this type.

: We recommendselecting the trackball when

purchasing a user interface

device of this type.


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? The trackball is deficient of the

mobility that a mouse has despite

the fact that the trackball requiresless hand movement than the

mouse.

: The trackball lacks themobility of a mouse although

the former requires less hand

movement than the latter.


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? The web browser in all cases gives

consideration to the user's needs

in a situation in which he or she isaway from the office.

: The web browser alwaysconsiders the user's needswhen he or she is away from the

office.


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B


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1. Ensure subject and verbagreement


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? Either the collected data set or two

additional outputs was used to

construct a neural network model.

: Either the collected dataset or two additional outputs

were used to construct a neuralnetwork model.


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? The research assistant and the

doctoral candidate are the same

person.

: The research assistantand the doctoral candidate is the

same person.


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? Physics make most first year

doctoral students nervous.

: Physics makes mostfirst year doctoral students

nervous.


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2. Ensure that pronoun

references are clear in meaning


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? When a decision reaches the final

stage, it must be implemented

promptly.

: When reaching the finalstage, a decision must be

implemented promptly.


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? No adjustment factors exist if (C1)

is violated, which implies that the

transformation approach can beimplemented.

: The fact that noadjustment factors exist if (C1)is violated implies that the

transformation approach can be

implemented.


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? Driving a car and talking on a

cellular phone at the same time is

dangerous; this could cause anaccident.

: Driving a car and talkingon a cellular phone at the sametime is dangerous; this habit

could cause an accident.


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3. Create sentences parallel instructure and meaning


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? The numerical example

concentrates mainly on illustration

of the cases derived in theprevious section and

demonstrating the effectiveness of

the proposed model.


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: The numericalexample illustrates thecases derived in theprevious section anddemonstrates theeffectiveness of theproposed model.


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? The committee made a decision to

set a new agenda and that the

meeting should be adjourned.

: The committee decidedto set a new agenda and adjourn

the meeting.


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? The robust design focuses not only

on collecting data accumulated

from the designed experiment, butalso that the results obtained by

using Taguchi's two-step

procedure are compared.


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: The robustdesign focuses not onlyon collecting dataaccumulated from thedesigned experiment, butalso on comparing theresults obtained by usingTaguchi's two-step

procedure.


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4. Eliminate modif ier problems


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? To keep in shape, exercise is a

must for an athlete.

: An athlete must exerciseto keep in shape.


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? When an engineer, customer

satisfaction should be attempted.

: An engineer shouldattempt to satisfy the customer.


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? After simulating a real environment,

a consensus was reached.

: After the researcherssimulated a real environment, a

consensus was reached.


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5. Double check for faultycomparisons and omissions


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? Our algorithm is more accurate

with respect to computational time.

: Our algorithm is moreaccurate than conventional ones

with respect to computational

time.


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? The chemistry department

cooperates with local industry

more than their department.

: The chemistrydepartment cooperates with

local industry more than theirdepartment does.


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? The novel material is as strong, if

not stronger than, available ones.

: The novel material is asstrong as, if not stronger than,

available ones.


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6. Avoid unnecessary shif ts ina sentence


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? Communicators must share a

common language or protocol so

that we can easily understandeach other.

: Communicators mustshare a common language orprotocol so that they can easily

understand each other.


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? A computer mouse needs some

available workspace and even the

beginning user can operate them

with very little difficulty.

: A computer mouseneeds some availableworkspace and even the

beginning user can operate one

with very little difficulty.


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? Execute the program commands

and the iteration steps must be

repeated.

: Execute the programcommands and repeat the

iteration steps.


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7. Combine conciseness andclarity

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